sonic memories

[phi666]

it was 1500 years ago on planet mobius the evil wizard zanthros robotnik(dr eggmans ancestor)with three of the seven chaos emralds and the master emrald ruled the planet ...........until mach the hedgehog a white hedgehog with red eyes(sonics ancesetor)and blaze the echidna an orange echidna with violet eyes(knuckles ancestor) put a stop to his evil wayswit the remaining chaos emralds sonic stole robotniks emralds and turns super mach he turns green when and glows blue he shatters the master emrald and defeats robotnok or so it seems......................

[phi666]

"come on tails hurry, knuckles sounded urgent on the phone"
"im trying sonic but youre just too fast"
"here grab my hand"
"got it sonic"
VADOOOM!
"WAAAAAAH sonic yooooore gooooooing tooooo faaaast"
"sorry tails weve got to hurry"
sonic and tails go at such a speed that they quickly skim across a lakes surface leaving a massive wake behind them
"there i can see it its bigger than i thought man eggman has really outdone himself this time"
the sillohete of a giant dome with some type of antennae loking structure on top neared on the horizon this only made sonic go all the faster to reach the destination
"were here tails"
"sonic i dont feel so gooooulp bluuuuugh vlagh" splattat"ulgh uip blaaaargh"
"oh man tails you dont look so hot"
"sonic *pant pant* im glad youre here robotnik kidnapped shadow and emerl and i cant bust through"
"calm down knuckles i'll handle this"
sonic pulls a ring from his pack and charges a spindash against the door causing enough friction to burn a hole in the steel and as the molten metal dripped down and hit his spikes they were immediatly slung away before the even had the chance to even singe the spikes whatsoever
nuckles stood back so as not to get any of the flying melted steel on him and tails was still vomiting from the trip there

end chapter 1

[phi666]

sonic got through the door and knuckles and tails followed their footsteps were loud and metallic against the hard grated metal floor.sonic stopped.
"did you hear that?"
"hear what sonic?"
"that........oh n-n-n-no......... emerl wha"
a tear rolled down sonics cheek as he picked up what was left of emerl
"s-s-sonic i love you tell mom i said bye"
"i will emerl i promise"
"(thinking)youll pay robotnik i swear youll pay with your life"
"s-sonic "
" shadow what happened?"
"r-robotnik got hold of me and emerl and he destroyed her to get to the chaos emralds ,then after he got them i was no match for him an i was easily defeated, i failed,i failed maria mmmm(passes out)"
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"robotnik ill kill you"
"sonic i was hoping you would show up so you could see my new ultimate power hahahahahahah"

robotnik charged up and sonic, at the same time whipped out a ring and charged at robotnik when the 2 powers collided something completely unexpected happened..................

end chapter 2

[Killarshark12]

Er, pretty good, but needs some punctuation, and a bit of Capitalization, and a LOT of detail, description, like

"Hurry Tails! Knux sounded urgent on the phone!" The blue blur impatiently yelled.

"I'm trying, Sonic, but you're just too fast! I can't keep up!" Tails yelled back, his two tails struggling to go faster.




Stuff like that would make it into a pretty good ff.

[phi666]

ahhh i dont really care its not really important just as long as the main idea gets across i mean its not like im gonna make it a profession or anything chapter 3 mabye later tonight ^_^ _l,,l

[Killarshark12]

Meh, if that's da way..

[phi666]

ive decided to give up on this fanfic unless anyone objects k ? ill give it a week if no one wants me to continue then i wont i suppose whoever wants to can continue the storyline they can ok im signing off bye

[Killarshark12]

I don't really care...I just read and comment.

[uhhsam]

coool

[AnimeFreak975]

Made me cry.....