Sonic World

[Espio 9]

This is my first story ever! I know this is going to be a great story,so read the whole story.

The characters are:
Sonic the hedgehog
Tails the fox
Knuckles the Echidna
Amy the hedggehog
Tornado th hedgehog
Slash the wolf
Illusion the hedgehog
Knockout the kangaroo
Hero Chao Master the chao
Snap the turtle
Espio the chamelion
Charmy Bee
Vector the crocodile
Cream the rabbit
Cheese the chao
Big the cat
Metal Sonic the robot
Mettallix the robot
Ninj-I the hedgehog
Pretty the mouse
Mighty the armadillo
Shadow the hedgehog
Eggman
Rouge the bat
Shock the hedgehog
E-102 Omega
Mecha Knuckles the robot
Metal Shadow the robot
Tidal Wave the robot
Pheonix the hedgehog
Lightning the hedgehog

Now here is the short prolouge

The rain sheared down in torrents over the wind swept Tornado fields.The gardian of planet Legends was the only creature outdoors. Tornado looked like a gray Shadow with black stripes. As the howling wind saught to destroy him in his green tunic, he howled like a bloodthirsty wolf. His howl was a challenge to all evil and it beared a simple message: Fight me if you dare!

[Espio 9]

Whatcha think?

[Espio 9]

The first chapter will come soon

[PSOXtreme]

Cool! My favorite part of it are the characters you created. (Metal Shadow is a really awesome idea)

Looks cool to read, although Id to know a bit more info on the storyline. (But hey, its only a SHORT prolouge...which is fine with me.) But...the prolouge only gives something like: *walk walk walk*...FIGHT ME NOW! lol (not to critisize, but you know what I mean)


But once I get to know the full details Id love to read it! Have fun writing it!

[Espio 9]

I'll definetly have fun writing it
Thanks for the comment
First chapter Monday or Tuesday

[PSOXtreme]

I'll definetly have fun writing it
Thanks for the comment
First chapter Monday or Tuesday

Cool. Ill be sure to check it out! :wink:

[darkwarrior4]

:shock: :shock: :shock: lots of hedgehogs, not enough cool ninja chemeleons

[Espio 9]

I finished chapter 1 early. I hope you like it

Chapter 1: The vision
Sonic yawned as he watched thepouring rain. It didn't show any sign of stopping. His mind wondered to when he first came to planet Legends.
(Flasback)
"What!!!!" Tails shouted.
"Your're joking, right?"said Knuckles.
"No I'm serious, the Earth is going to be destroyed by meteors" said Sonic seriously.
"That Eggman has finally ruined the worled"muttered Knuckles.
(End of flashback)
Sonic yawned again as he watched the ever increasing downpour outside Tails's home.Tails had shared his home with all his friends: Sonic, Amy, Hero Chao Master, Metal Sonic, Mettallix, Shock, and Pheonix. Ever since they came to planet Legends it was very peaceful. Sonic yawned again and remembered how they solved the problem of Earth ending. Tails made enough rockets to take the entire Earth population to another planet. No living creature or any object was left behind. Not even Eggman.
"Sonic!!" Tails hollered from in the kitchen.
"What!!" Sonic shouted back.
"Dinners ready!!" Tails answered.
Sonic yawned and jumped off his bed. His bed was dark blue and next to the window. The rest of his room was almost undiscribable. Clothes, papers, magazines, machine parts, hair, bags of all sizes, board games, a gameboy, a gamecube, and tons of trash littered his floor and walls. As he fought his way out of his room he remembered what happened in the years after they left. They never knew whether Earth blew up or not, but they were too busy to think about it. The Earth's population found on its journey uninhabitable planets hostile creatures, space aliens, black holes, and traps. When all hope was lost they fond what Tails called"a miriacle planet". A beautiful planet that resembled Earth. All the inhabitants were friendly and the Earth dwellers mixed in easily. Sonic was brought back to reallity when the lovely aroma of Tails's cooking. When he entered the kitchen he saw a beautiful spread.Cornbread, corn, hotdogs, hamburgers, rice, bread, and soup. Everyone waited for Sonic to sit down. The second Sonic sat down everyone launched themselves into the food. There were no leftovers. As Sonic walked back into his room,his head throbbed with pain as several images that had recently haunted his brain returned. He first saw a hedgehog howling madly in the wind.Then he saw Eggman howling with laughter. Next a creature that looked like Metal Sonic shot electricity at him. Last he saw himself in an unknown level of Super Sonic. Sonic then blacked out.

Whatcha think?

[Espio 9]

I'm here again any comments?

[deathwarrior]

A

[Espio 9]

A
Thanks new chapter when I get to it

[Espio 9]

New chapter soon

[Espio 9]

Anybody here

[Espio 9]

Hello

[deathwarrior]

hi

[Espio 9]

hi
hi

[sugarandspice]

hi

a+

hi

[sugarandspice]

hi

a+

hi

long time no see espio my lonsome copy

[Espio 9]

OOOOOOOOOOOOkaYYYYYYYY

[Espio 9]

I'm here

[Espio 9]

Anyone here(new chapter tommorrow)

[Espio 9]

Happy Place!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Espio 9]

See ya tommorrow

[Killarshark12]

*looks around* I think I'm in the wrong topic.

[Espio 9]

Why!(New chapter at 8:30)

[deathwarrior]

HELLZ YEAH

[Espio 9]

Chapter 2- the tablets of time
Rouge sighed as she walked through Mystic Island's forest.It wasn't raining there. Tt was very beautiful. The trees were gigantic and completly green. Flowers of all kinds covered the ground. Rouge picked one as she saw the outskirts of the Mystic Temple.The Mystic temple was exactly the same as Angel Island's shrine. As Rouge approached a familiar vioce greeted her.
"Who goes there?"an angry voice growled.
"It's me Slash you old windbag."Rouge answered.
"Go in Rouge, Knuckles is studying the tablet."Slash said.
"Thanks, don't get sun burn up there."Rouge replied.
"I won't."Slash answered from the roof of the temple.
As Rouge entered she remembered the fight Slash and Knuckles had when they first arrived.
(Flasback)
"Grrr! Get out of the way wolf."Knuckles growled at Slash.
"I'm the sworn guardian of the temple, so no!!" Slash shouted back.
" I'll go through you then." Knuckles shouted.
"I'd like to see you try." Slash said dangerously.
" Don't fight." Rouge pleaded.
Knuckles looked at Rouge for a second. That second was the second Slash attacked.
(Battle Scene)

Slash hp=6000
Knuckles hp=6000

Slash claw attack=-500

Knuckles hp=5500

" oh yeah take this." yelled Knuckles.

Knuckles double punch=-1000
Hits pillar= -100

Slash hp=4800

"Take this you jerk!" they hollered.

Knuckles Thunder Arrow: -4000
Slash X claw attack:-4700

Slash hp=800
Knuckles hp=800
(End of Battle scene)
Both Slash and Knuckles huffed and puffed. They raised their hands to attack.
"Enough you to." said Rouge getting between them.
" Can't we reach an agreement." Roge inquired.
After a lot of debating they agreeed to share the temple and the Mystic Emerald( a yellow Master Emerald) space.
( End of Flashback)
As she thought back she wandered how the brown wolf and Knuckles ever got along. Rouge looked around and saw Knuckles stooped in front of an ancient stone. The ancient stone was a tablet of time which only appeared when needed. They told future events in poems. The tablets were never wrong. Knuckles was concerned because Slash said they usually meant trouble.
"Knuckles!"Rouge called.
" Yeah."Knuckles answered.
"How far did you get." Rouge asked.
" Not far, I'll read the poem you might get it." Knuckles said.

Years from the arrival
Chaos will come
Not the creature, though
It will come
In the form
Of a Hedgehog
Not from this world, though
The creature seeks
Legends end
Hero please
Do this for me
Find the Chaos and the Legend
Then Destroy the hedgehog
Beware the element of power
And the familiar sight
For the creature will end Legends if you don't
Hero please
Do this for me
And keep your friends close
The friends to have
Are as follows
The guardian of Legends
The good with the element of power
The firebird and
The Shadow
Win Hero win

" What does it all mean Knuckles." Rouge asked.
" All I know is that it means trouble." said Knuckles.

[Espio 9]

Whatcha think

[sugarandspice]

A+

[shadow_the_hedgehog123]

Nice Espio 9. A+++++++++!

[Espio 9]

Thanks new chap today or tommorrow

[Killarshark12]

All of these guys grade too easy. Though it's pretty decent, it has a few spelling errors...and it needs a little bit more description. OH, and sspice, you can't tell me ta shut up because I'm just saying how he can make it better. Description like "The flowers paled in size to the large trees covered with sweet smelling moss. Flowers of delicate beauty dotted the ground." Stuff like that, k? Other than that, grade:


C+


Average, but you can do better.

[sugarandspice]

oh shut up killer

[deathwarrior]

oh shut up killer
oh shut up sas

[shadow_the_hedgehog123]

oh shutup deathwarrior,sas, and killer!

[Espio 9]

Get along people, Killar I'll take your critism to heart in future chapters

[Espio 9]

Hi

[sugarandspice]

hi

[Espio 9]

I'm here

[deathwarrior]

HELLZ YEAH YOUR BACK

[Espio 9]

Ok New chap today tommorrow or some other time

[AwlAmericanDawg]

oh shutup deathwarrior,sas, and killer!



Why Dont U All!

[deathwarrior]

you shut up

[Killarshark12]

I'm sayin how it is, sspice. You don't really have a right to tell me ta shut up. As I said, I'm only saying how he can make it better. Ah SHADDUP AMERICAN DOg :mrgreen:

[deathwarrior]

I'm sayin how it is, sspice. You don't really have a right to tell me ta shut up. As I said, I'm only saying how he can make it better. Ah SHADDUP AMERICAN DOg :mrgreen:
HELLZ YEAH :mrgreen:

[Killarshark12]

......now what?

[Espio 9]

Be nice you guys

[Espio 9]

All of these guys grade too easy. Though it's pretty decent, it has a few spelling errors...and it needs a little bit more description. OH, and sspice, you can't tell me ta shut up because I'm just saying how he can make it better. Description like "The flowers paled in size to the large trees covered with sweet smelling moss. Flowers of delicate beauty dotted the ground." Stuff like that, k? Other than that, grade:


C+


Average, but you can do better.

I'll do a lot better

[Espio 9]

I'm back

[Killarshark12]

All of these guys grade too easy. Though it's pretty decent, it has a few spelling errors...and it needs a little bit more description. OH, and sspice, you can't tell me ta shut up because I'm just saying how he can make it better. Description like "The flowers paled in size to the large trees covered with sweet smelling moss. Flowers of delicate beauty dotted the ground." Stuff like that, k? Other than that, grade:


C+


Average, but you can do better.

I'll do a lot better

Hey don't copy my quote.

[Espio 9]

All of these guys grade too easy. Though it's pretty decent, it has a few spelling errors...and it needs a little bit more description. OH, and sspice, you can't tell me ta shut up because I'm just saying how he can make it better. Description like "The flowers paled in size to the large trees covered with sweet smelling moss. Flowers of delicate beauty dotted the ground." Stuff like that, k? Other than that, grade:


C+


Average, but you can do better.

I'll do a lot better

Hey don't copy my quote.
Sorry

[Espio 9]

Here

[Espio 9]

Bye

[Killarshark12]

Eh bye. And it's ok. DONT' COPY IT, though.

[Espio 9]

Roger

[shadow_the_hedgehog123]

Whats up.

[Espio 9]

Nothing and you?

[darkwarrior4]

HELLO!!

[Espio 9]

Hi

[Espio 9]

HI ALL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Sonic_heroes]

OMG, this story caoght my attention ride away. You got a A+. Good job espio 9 or 7.

[Espio 9]

OMG, this story caoght my attention ride away. You got a A+. Good job espio 9 or 7.
Thanks I'm writing the 3 chapter

[deathwarrior]

dsfgetertrt

[Espio 9]

dsfgetertrt
???????????!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :shock: :shock: :shock: :shock:

[Killarshark12]

*YAWN*

[Espio 9]

*YAWN*
You bored?

[Espio 9]

New chapter soon

[Espio 9]

New chapter at 8:00 am

[Espio 9]

Chapter 3-Shadow’s new roommate
High up in space lived Shadow the hedgehog. After the Earth population landed Shadow immediately went to the space center: Heroes. Shadow didn’t like the name, but he chose to live there regardless. He lived with Snap the green turtle and Omega. They got along harmoniously all the time. The day Sonic blacked out, Shadow was skating down the large and window-laden boarding docks, when he heard a commotion in sector B.
“Catch the trespasser,” someone screeched loudly.
“Arrrghhh!!” someone screamed.
As Shadow looked at the commotion, the trespasser, a cream colored kangaroo ran toward him.
“Help me hedgehog.” the kangaroo begged with an Australian accent.
“Get in here” Shadow said shoving him into a nearby closet.
The boarding dock humans dashed toward Shadow.
“Did you see a kangaroo go by here?” They asked unaware that Shadow had hid the kangaroo.
“Yes, but he seemed friendly so discontinue your search” Shadow said
“If he’s okay by you we’ll let him stay up here” said a worker.
The second he workers left the kangaroo bounced out of the closet.
“Thanks mate, my name’s Knockout and I am now your friend for life because you saved my tail” said Knockout blissfully.
“Whatever” said Shadow.” Follow me to my room”
“Right mate” Knockout answered.
Shadow and Knockout entered a glass elevator and took it to the 12th floor. They then got out and walked to room 999.
“Here we are” said Shadow opening the door.
“Cool” said Knockout.
Knockout bounced around the room with ever increasing speed until he accidentally slammed the door shut and broke a door.
“This is going to be a long life” Shadow said shaking his head and wondering how he got himself into this mess.
***

In the dense forest village named Jungle Town, the Chaotix Detective Agency had made a base. It was identical to the old base except they had two new members. One was a hedgehog named Ninj-I, but everyone called him Ninj for short. Ninj was a dark shade of purple with black stripes covering his body. He was a ninja like Espio but he was much faster. Ninj used a vanishing technique that was similar to Espio’s. The other member was a cute mouse named Pretty. Pretty was a hazel color with white spots appearing in random places. She was smart and was a talented fighter. Pretty was Ninj’s girlfriend. They had met team Chaotix as soon as they landed. Mighty had gotten over his illness and rejoined team Chaotix. They had no work until one day a mysterious package arrived.
Vector was listening to the team dark theme song and Espio was meditating when all of a sudden Charmy burst in with a package.
“We have work” shouted Charmy crashing into the desk.
“Let me see it” said Vector while calling all the members of team Chaotix together.
“Team Chaotix I have work for you and I will pay you greatly if you except” said a walkie talkie that was in the box.
“We’ll take it” said Vector with dollar signs in his eyes.
With that team Chaotix started their adventure.
***

Crash!!!!!!!Smash!!!!!!!!!Boom!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
At Eggman’s abandoned desert base a strange thing had happened. In the abandoned projects lab, the cases holding the creatures had suddenly exploded. Goop that was in the cases covered the charred floor as a multitude of creatures stepped out. The one’s we will focus on are a trio of three outraged machines. One was a being named Metal Shadow. Metal Shadow looked like shadow in its color, but its body looked like Metal Sonic’s
body. The second was Mecha Knuckles. Mecha Knuckles was steamed at the fact that he was abandoned. The third creature was Tidal Wave. Tidal Wave looked like Mecha Knuckles, but he was entirely blue.
“We must escape to find Eggman and take our revenge” said Metal Shadow.
Mecha punched a hole in a nearby charred wall.
“Will this do” asked Mecha.
“Yes” said Metal Shadow.
With that the trio left to destroy Eggman.

[Espio 9]

What do you think?

[shadow_the_hedgehog123]

Nice. A+++++++++++++++!!!!!!!!!!!

[Espio 9]

Nice. A+++++++++++++++!!!!!!!!!!!
Thanks I'm writing chapter 4 now

[Espio 9]

I wonder if Killar improved my grade?

[shadow_the_hedgehog123]

Grade my story What really happened to Shadow. Its not done yet.

[Espio 9]

Allright

[shadow_the_hedgehog123]

Wheres the next chapter?

[Espio 9]

Chapter 3 was the new one

[shadow_the_hedgehog123]

Anymore

[Espio 9]

Working on it

[Espio 9]

Would't get it until Tuesday anyway

[shadow_the_hedgehog123]

Alright.

[Espio 9]

New chap soon

[Espio 9]

Hi

[Espio 9]

New chapter soon

[Espio 9]

Killar do you have a new grade for my story?

[darkwarrior4]

D.

[Espio 9]

D.
WHAT?????????!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[shadow_the_hedgehog123]

A+++++++!!!!

[takerutakaishi]

Your story was really good, and i had a good time reading it.

Descritpion: Your description was really good, a lot of people hardly do it. Though there could be a bit more, it was basically one of the best descriptions of the stories i've read at the new boards. Grade: 90%

Detail: Your detail was top notch, you payed very close atention at how each character was going on. When you described Sonic's room, i got a very clear mental picture. Grade: 91%

Dialogue: It was not bad, not good. Though it had some repetitiveness, it was overall great. Grade: 88%

Typing Accuracy: You had 11 unacceptable typos. There were more, but I allowed those to happen. Gtade: 89%

Storyline: The story is still in its developing stage, and there is no clear purpose yet. Grade: GP

Time It Takes To Read: Average of about 11:00 to read up to now. Now, some of your chapters were long, some short. Grade: 85%

TILT: 89%

Overall: It's a pretty good story that I wish you would continue quickly, but not so quick that it would start becoming rushed and unorganized. I like where this is going. GRADE: 88.7, or B+

[Espio 9]

Yeah!!!!!!!!!!

[Espio 9]

New chap soon

[Espio 9]

New chap soon

[takerutakaishi]

um... yayness?

[Espio 9]

um... yayness?
?

[Espio 9]

The new chap will take a while.........I wrote it up and forgot to save it before I left

[Espio 9]

The new chap will take a while.........I wrote it up and forgot to save it before I left

[takerutakaishi]

i hate it when that happens

[Espio 9]

i hate it when that happens

It was almost done!!!!!!!!!!!!!WHY DIDN'T I REMEMBER TO SAVE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Espio 9]

i hate it when that happens

It was almost done!!!!!!!!!!!!!WHY DIDN'T I REMEMBER TO SAVE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Espio 9]

New chap soon

[Espio 9]

New chap soon

[Espio 9]

I'm going to start another story soon so I won't continue this story for a little bit

[Espio 9]

The new story backfired................New chap tommorrow or Saterday

[Espio 9]

Chapter 4-Of Speed, Wind, and Evil
“Oooooooooohhhhhhhh” groaned Sonic as he woke up.
As Sonic woke up he took in his surroundings. He was in Legends hospital. It was the best hospital on planet Legends. The room had 5 visitor chairs to the right of him. The rest of the room was white and empty except for the windows alloying sunshine to come in. Sonic lay back and remembered the nightmare again. The images haunted him but he didn’t care. At that moment Tails, Amy, Hero Chao Master, Metal Sonic, Mettallix, Shock, and Phoenix entered the room.
“Hey Sonic” Everyone said to Sonic.
“Hi” said Sonic.
“Are you feeling better” Tails asked.
“I feel ready to run” said Sonic jumping out of bed.
“Good I found an island floating in the sky, we should check it out” said Tails.
“Let’s go” said Sonic. Sonic then grabbed Tails, rushed down 13 floors and out the door.
“Which direction is it Tails” Sonic said while still running.
“North” Tails managed to gasp.
“Here we go!” Sonic shouted as he made a straight course north.

On the windy island of Tornado fields a gray hedgehog that looked like Shadow stared into a blue flame. Inside the flame it showed Sonic and Tails running toward Tornado fields.
“Illusion, come here for a moment please!” the hedgehog shouted.
Illusion was an orange hedgehog with black stripes covering his body. At the moment the hedgehog called he was training by punching and kicking a punching bag.
“What’s up Tornado?” Illusion asked the gray hedgehog.
“Look into the flames and tell me what you see” Tornado requested.
“I see a blue hedgehog and a yellow fox that are trespassing on our land” Illusion answered.
“When they arrive bring them right here” Tornado said.
“Okay Tornado” Illusion said.

“We’re almost their Tails” Sonic shouted.
“I know” Tails mumbled.
They had seen the island from a distance only seconds before. Now they were right under it. It looked similar to Mystic Island from below. On the outskirts of the island were miniature blocks of land hovering in the air. Sonic imagined the blocks of land were covered in grass. As they reached the center of the island a pool of light covered the ground and Sonic started slowly floating through the air. Tails grabbed Sonic and flew upward to make the assent faster. As they grew closer to the island Tails noticed a hole that he could enter. He flew into it and found himself in front of an alter with a blue flame on it. Tails then noticed a gray hedgehog that looked like Shadow walking in front of the flame.
“Look Sonic….” Tails started.
“Bow before the guardian of planet Legends foolish newcomers!!!!!!!” the hedgehog shouted. “I Tornado am the guardian, bow now!!!!!
“And what if we don’t?” Sonic said dangerously.
“I shall execute you for trespassing” Tornado answered.
“Just try it” said Sonic.
Tornado charged.

After everyone left Legends hospital, Metal Sonic roamed the streets. He wandered down every street looking for something to do. He found something to do on Fire road. A black sphere was hurtling toward cars and blowing them up. As the sphere came toward Metal it stopped and disappeared. In its place was a robot like shadow in its color, but its body looked like Metal Sonic’s body.
“Strange life-form found….” Said the robot.
“Who are you?” asked Metal Sonic.
“I am Metal Shadow…….Who are you?” asked Metal Shadow.
“I’m Metal Sonic, please stop destroying cars” Metal Sonic pleaded.
“I will not stop…..Metal Sonic” said Metal Shadow.
“I’ll have to use force then” said Metal Sonic.
“I’d like to see you try……Metal Sonic” said Metal Shadow dangerously.

[Espio 9]

Whatcha think?

[Espio 9]

Whatcha think?

[Espio 9]

Whatcha think?

[Espio 9]

New chap soon

[Espio 9]

Chapter 5-The Birth of the ultimate evil
Far off in Legends desert lay a great pyramid. It looked as though it was comprised of sand, but upon closer inspection of the yellowish stone you would find that it was made out of metal. On the South wall of the metal pyramid you would find a modern door which you could open easily. This pyramid is Eggman’s base. In the robotics lab was the egg-shaped doctor himself, working on a robot. The robot was no ordinary robot however it was Metal Sonic 5. Metal Sonic 5 was code named Lighting because of its ability to summon immense bolts of lightning. Lightning was all black except for two jagged yellow lightning bolts that ran down its sides. Other than those details it looked exactly like Metal Sonic. Eggman had a front hatch open on Lightning and was currently trying to restart Lightning.
“Hmmmmm, maybe if I turn the power on I could restart him…….But he would have a greater chance of malfunctioning……….Who cares, start the power!!!!!” said Eggman.
A robot near the main power switch turned on the power and the room was then engulfed in light. Lightning’s red eyes lit up and stared at its creator. Before anyone could react a giant bolt of lightning sheared through the roof and engulfed Lightning.
“Run!!!!!!” shouted Eggman.
As the robots and Eggman fled the lightning strike area increased and destroyed Eggman’s base in a single thunderous boom. As the dust cleared a single figure rose. Lightning flew up into the air.
“I’m FREE!!!!!!!!!!!HAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!" Shouted Lightning.


(Sorry this is so short)

[Espio 9]

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[supermetalsonic3]

Awsome

[supermetalsonic3]

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