The Chronicles of Vahn

[Vahn of the Eclipse]

This fan fic will star my character, but i would to have others join him in the story, it will be very action heavy, especially character vs character,
Now, i can only have a few members too be on Vahns team, meaning 2 or 3. So if you want to be a part of the team tell me that, otherwise your character will be an enemy, dpending on the enemy you make, they may become an eternal rival or just die rather quickly, maybe even some friendly rivals will be thrown in. By the way, this takes place on a planet like ragol, but it has many cities and competions and has all the same weapons and such as in PSO.

Here is some backround on Vahn.

Name- Vahn
AKA- Dark Eclipse
Age- 23
Eye color- Dark Green
Class- HUmar
Hair- Chin length Black
Skin- Slightly tanned white
Outfit- All Black
Weapons-The Orotiagito
Build- Assassin body (not extremely muscle bound, but incredibly fast and strong)
Height- 6' 3"
Weight- 155 lbs
The many limits of Vahn- What few people now about Vahn is that he trained himself since childhood early on soon after his parents died. He has his own style of swordsmanship, and has forcefully pain trained. Through all of these times, his body has learned to go beyind the normal human limits. It is a transention in which he becomes more powerful, while seemingly glowing with a dark aura. He has many levels like this, it becomes much more powerful at the higher levels, but he cant hold some of them for long, plus some have adverse affects.
Eclipse Attack- After Quickly sheathing his sword, doing the correct japanese hand seals, he unsheaths his sword and it starts to glow with the same dark aura the Vahn does after opening what he calls "
limits." When this happens, he seemingly dissappers and reappers behind the target, after which they stand there and then their top half slides off.
Bio- Renowned assassin who is known little about besides his name. Never talks except when absoluely neccesary.Trained by Orochi Agitos last heir in swordsmanship, and trained by the three Rifle making masters, Justy, Wals and Visk in Marksmenship. Known as "Dark Eclipse" because of his wearing all black and his quick, instant killing blows usually aimed at the jugular or spinal column. Never has been defeated by anyone besides the one person who he wants revenge on, Kireek The Black Hound. Vahn (Dark Eclipse) is a true man of mystery which nothing can bother.

>>>EDIT<<<
That special attack and Bio will not be used, they give you clues about his character correctly, but they will not be used for this story, the limits of vahn will be used, but not until the story goes back to the normal timeline.

[Comander death]

u know i'm in

[Vahn of the Eclipse]

the usual i presume, millardow, you want to be a team member?

[tinimike]

Umm, if you don`t mind, I`ll join...

[Vahn of the Eclipse]

ok, friend or foe, and guys please choose a weapon

[Comander death]

if u don't mind i would like to be your enemy at first i'd like to see what a fight between our chars if u write it

[what did happen to robot]

i wanna join
Im robot jones
ranger male robot
short skinny
and my weapon of choice is this really strong rifle i forgot the name plz let me join and dont make me die plz :D :D :D

[Vahn of the Eclipse]

Okay, i will probably start the story sometime tomorrow, so be on the look out. HAHAHAHAHA, I feel like somebody spiked my drink. Anyway it will start off with just Vahn and Millardow, so the rest of you will come in later k, good.

[Chaoscajin]

If you'd like Chaos is open for an adventure

[Vahn of the Eclipse]

Thanks chaoscajin

[Vahn of the Eclipse]

Here goes...

Chapter 1: First Fight

"Clang," the sound of the swords echoed through the air. The two combatants jumped backwards to gather their breath. Both of their hair hanging over their faces and in front of their eyes. They were drenching with sweat, and covered with each others blood.

"I can't believe this is taking so long to take you down," Millardow the infamous assassin said, barely squeezing the words between his teeth.

"Save your breath," Vahn muttered. Soon after that escaped his mouth he seemingly slid right behind Millardow, just as the blade was about to reach his enemies spine, Vahn noticed that the blade of the opponent had already reached there to block. A parry soon followed, as Millardow knocked Vahn's sword away, Vahn had jumped back just in time to catch the sword and quickly slid it into his hilt.

"Time to finish you," Just to get his words out seemed like struggle. He moved his hands into the hand seal for Rin, and quickly changed it to Ino. Vahn began to glow with a strange aura, it seemed to resonate directly from the core of his body. At this the face on Millardow changed from all out seriousness to disbelief. He had heard about this before, but had never witnessed it.

"No, this can't be true, this isn't happening, this is only supposed to be a legend," Millardow gasped as he stepped back not believing what he was seeing.

"There is no legend to this, it is mine alone," Vahn announced, somehow sounding much more sinister to Millardow than before.

"No, I have heard of this before, it is a legendary power," Millardow began to back up again.

"No, it isn't true!" Vahn screamed as he reappeared directly in front of Millardow, his sword came down as he began to hear the hum of a telepipe. Vahn was unsure about what he had heard, but he sheathed his sword none the less as he walked away. All that was left at the scene was the stray left hand of Millardow the infamous Assassin.





Well, that is it so far... Sorry I'm not going to be righting long chapters :mrgreen:
Please tell me what you think
I still need some team members for Vahn to partner up with

[Comander death]

:o wow that was great! it would be cool if you could put my special tech in there if u don't know what it is than read my chars bio on chaos' story

[Vahn of the Eclipse]

With the dark mist and the eyes that turn grayish, sure
and thanks for the input c death

the next chap should be up in a couple of days :wink:

[tinimike]

I`d like to be an ally.Here is my character info:
Mike
FOmar
Weapon: Katana
Fighting Style: Heten Mitsarugi Ryu (Yes the f-style of Batosi, the man slayer aka Kenshin Himora)
Apperance:Red Hair, Black Robes

P.S.
If you fell the need for my character to die, try to make his death not so pathetic, ok? (Like being killed by rabid Rag Rappies)

[Chaoscajin]

Oh btw use Chaos as you think he should be used good or evil but make sure he stays true to his personality overconfident and never able to give up or back down

[Vahn of the Eclipse]

thamks guys, but com on tinimike, you could be a little more original, o well, i know the style nearly by heart, so you are in luck

[Vahn of the Eclipse]

if no one else joins then chaos will be the comic relief k.

And i seriously need a chick in the story, a hot chick...
so

name- Jenny HUnewearl Age- 22
Eyes- Hazel (with that innocent look)
Build- Athletic (and very very good looking)
Hair- Light Brown- Down to her mid torso
Height- 5' 7" Weight- 121 lbs
Clothes- Tight zipper down long sleeve w/ a small open collar (collar is up), the zipper down enough to show cleavage, Pants are also rather tight, denim like, but flows and breaths and stretches to accomodate for movement
Personality- Bubbly, guy obsessed, fun loving, doesnt like to fight

[Momonpso]

Very good so far. :D Keep up the good work. There was one sentence that bothered me tho. : "Vahn began to glow with a strange aura, it seemed to resonate directly from the core of Vahn." Instead of saying "from the core of Vahn", it would sound better if you said something like "...directly from the core of his body."

[Supersayajin_Pito]

I'll pitch in a character.

Name: Excalibur
I.D: ORAN
Class: Mixture between RAmar and HUmar
Weapons: Last Survivor, Yasminkov 2000H (Pistol)
Age: 20
Height: 5' 11"
Weight: 150 lbs
Hair: Black
Eyes: Black
Build: Balanced
Clothes: Old styled Gunner Outfit
Personality: Loves fighting with the sword more than his love of guns

He can be either friend or foe, whichever you prefer.

[Vahn of the Eclipse]

Thanks for the english lesson mom, and Pito good character, ill be sure too add him in

oh and mom if you have a char you can add him/her in

sry guys, i think i can only use one more char for now, until some people either die or leave the story

[Chaoscajin]

Not to mess with your story but i'd prefer not being a comedy relief Chaos is a warrior of huge and at times too much confidence who never backs down from battle a either soul of pure evil or honorable good plz write as such

[tinimike]

thamks guys, but com on tinimike, you could be a little more original, o well, i know the style nearly by heart, so you are in luck

I could be original, but the I`d be like everyone else! (Besides, I couldn`t think of any other fighting style.)

[Momonpso]

Well if you like you can use my little FOnewearl. Her name is Trientje, she has red hair and wears a blue and white outfit and has a bow in her hair. She isn't very strong yet but she heals allies and weakens enemies quite nicely. She's kind of shy but always kind.

[what did happen to robot]

are you gonna use me soon???

[Vahn of the Eclipse]

I have to have some sort of coedy relief, o well, maybe mike or excalibur will fill that gap, and thatnks for the char mom, she could be the char who gets in trouble, lol, anyway, for anyone else out there, i am sorry to say that all robots will not be in this story, it is human and newman only, i am sorry but tha is how i would like the story to move along,

The second chap should be up either later today or tm, 8)

[what did happen to robot]

aw man now i am so sad :cry: :cry:
i got another character too
HUmar
death lord
yelloyboze
tall and fat

[Vahn of the Eclipse]

sry guys im having a little block, but i will tell you that the story is going back to the childhood of Vahn and his teammates, how it all started and maybe some of why he is who he is, the first chap was an action entry, which there will still be action, but the characters will be a lot younger, like write now Vahn is 24, this will go back from when he was a baby, then to the early years followed by early teenager, and maybe some in the 16 ish range.

[Comander death]

well it already looks like u can write the next chap just build off of the basics like who his parents are who his friends are his enemies, where he was born, his training that stuff i have a block 2 so i'm trying to come up with some new stuff

[Vahn of the Eclipse]

Yeah, i know, i just am a little busy recently, having trouble thinking aboutstuff like this

[Vahn of the Eclipse]

Well, I feel it is the time to try to write a new chapter, I'm sorry if I ever forget to use characters, that may just mean that they are very basic, or they will just be written in later, so don't feel bad if you aren't in right away.

BTW, in this part of the story, Vahn and his partners will be of age 12, and their training is really just starting.

Chapter 2: Beginnings

"I hate you Vahn!" her voice rang throughout the hall, "I hate you for everything!" Vahn looked confused at this, being the constant trouble maker that he was, he never knew what was going on.
"What did I do this time?" He asked Jenny, his team member, who everyone seemed to like. At that, she began to cry and ran away.
"Dude, come on, you know what happened, unless you were being yourself again," Excalibur let out a small chuckle.
"Shut it Ex, you aren't exactly having any luck, I really don't like anyway, she is just a teammate."
"That's what they all say, and if that is true, maybe I'll give it a try with her," Ex tipped his hat.
"Yeah, sure, go ahead, like I said, I don't like her, whatever."

The next day was the first day of training for the three, there groups had just been decided a few days earlier by the village elders. Vahn, Ex, and Jen had all been at the extremes of the class, Vahn, the smart but sarcastic kid who everyone seemed to be against. Ex, the somewhat comical, class clown who always got his way. And Jen, she was one of the prettiest of the group, nobody could say otherwise, but that is sometimes the problem.
A deep voice came from just beyond the door, "Hello, I will be your teacher of battle and tactics for at least the following year." When he stepped into the room, Jen's eyes lit up like the fourth of July, while both Vahn and Ex just rolled there eyes and sighed at Jenny. Jen thought he was the most handsome person she had ever seen, his flowing hair, just at the top of his eyes made a dark brown halo to her, he seemed so perfect. While on the other hand, Vahn and Ex just thought he was another guy that only knew the textbook, and could never have fun. The look on his face matched both of those descriptions quite well. His eyes fell upon the three, he realized he was dealing with the usual stereotypes. That is when he broke the silence. "Tommorow will be your first day of training, meet me outside this buiding for survival training at 0500 hours, oh, and don't eat breakfast unless you want to throw it up." That is when he left.
Jenny's eyes were still aglow when he was 20 yards down the hallway, shw was just staring at where he had been standing. "Well, this will be fun," Ex remarked, The two boys chuckled.
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Like I said, short chapters, and... Yeah, Vahn is really different, I know, but that is how I wanted him to be, some important things happen in the near future. Anyway, tell me what you think, there will be more action next time, but remember, this is the backstory and training, so it will get more action packed as time goes on.

[Momonpso]

So far so good. :)

[Vahn of the Eclipse]

Chapter 3: Survival Training

_At 0530 hours_

"Uhh, sorry I'm late, I had something to do," Ex was the last to arrive at the building that morning.
"Like what, give our teacher a bad impression!" Vahn yelled at Ex.
"Don't worry about it, just don't be late again," Their instructor commented. The three students all were sitting on a small bench when the instructor said, "Well, we'll be together for a while, so why don't you guys tell me and eachother about yourselves."
"Can we hear something about you? we don't even know your name," Vahn asked to their somewhat interesting teacher.
"Of course, I'll start, my name is James Hendrick, most people just call me Hendrick, which is what you can call me, I don't really want to discuss my interests or dislikes with you yet, and I don't care what you think about me... ok, your turn," He pointed to Jen.
"Umm, ok, well my name is Jennifer Tanner, but everyone calls me Jen, and I like cute boys, I dislike Vahn," A small grunt came from the corner of Vahn's mouth. "...and I dislike to fight."
"Alright, moving on," Hendrick said as he pointed to Ex.
"Well my name is Jonathan Excalibur, but everyone calls me Ex, I like swords, guns, and most other weapons, I dislike losing, and I really like to just be around people, I feel more comfortable when I am talking with others."
"Right then, and you," He said pointing to Vahn.
"I am Vahn, just Vahn, I have no parents, or at least I never knew them," Jen's and Ex's jaws had dropped at this, they had never known that. "I like to fight to get out my aggression and feelings, so I can seem normal to everyone else at other times, I also like to be alone a lot of the time, I dislike being condescended to, and I hate it when others talk behind my back." After hearing that, Hendrick thought he might have someone to teach that could really learn from him, not just listen and know the basics.
"Well, alright, I guess we should move on to our training spot," he began to walk towards the woods. About 15 minutes later, they came across a large clearing in the woods.
"Now, I have attached these three numbered peices of wood to the back of my belt, you each have one as well, you must get the one that matches your number if you want to eat lunch," they all looked at their pieces of wood. Vahn had 1, Ex had 3, Jen had 3 as well, Hendrick must have 1 and both 2's. "Now, remove all the weapons you are carrying," Vahn removed a few throwing knives and a short sword from his equipment, Ex removed a few throwing knives as well, but also his brass knuckles, which were his favorite things at the time, Jen didn't have anything, like usual she didn't have any desire to fight with anyone else. This is when it occured to Vahn that he hadn't eaten breakfast, and the only way to eat would be to get a wood block from his own teacher, while the others could get the blocks from eachother.
"Well, what are you guys looking at, time is up at noon,that is, if you want to eat lunch, begin."
Vahn quickly dissappeared into the brush, knowing that he would have to work for this. Not just lunch, but his teacher's trust.

[tinimike]

Hey this story`s pretty good Vahn, keep it up!

[Comander death]

nice work vahn and if you work me into the past i'm a bit older than u

[Vahn of the Eclipse]

Thanks for the support guys, and commander death, i'm not sure if i'm going to use your character in the past, but if i do, i'll keep that in mind

[Comander death]

all right thx

[Supersayajin_Pito]

Heh. Coming along nicely.