PSO :: In The Heat Of Battle [Part 6 (2) added 17/12/04]

[Tide]

paste this into the URL bar -
http://www.tidesinger.com/heatofbattle.htm
I realise there's a couple of typos, so don't eat me!

[Momonpso]

Wow! I loved it! Nice story...I hope you plan to continue it.

[shake__0]

Do you know the last episode/battle of Cowboy Bebop? It felt just as intense. I am glad that I could picture everything from the great and clear writing, please continue.

[GuardianKnuckles]

very good very good i really enjoyed that keep up the great work man

[supersonic703]

Really, really nice story you got here. This is worth continuing for along time.

[Tide]

Thanks for the comments guys. ^^;

Only trouble is I'm not sure were to take the story to develop it further. Do you have any suggestions?

Just continue the battle? Or should I continue in another place and introduce new characters?

[Momonpso]

I would move your story on to another place and add more characters. But not too many, just 1 or 2.

[Tenks reaction2]

That is some extreme detail. Great story are u ever going to add more or stick to the first great chapter?

[Tide]

Funny you should ask... I was having a few thoughts spinning through my head concerning that earlier.

I've decided to take momonpso's advice, and go with new characters. The previous entry was actually placed inside the VR Spaceship level (did you guess?), with 2 hunters. I'm thinking about going for a Ranger on Ranger battle. Nothing like a good gunfight - I used to be quite good at writing those. Remember the battle mode rule 6? Hide behind the walls to shoot your opponent? I think I'll go for something like that. I'm considering setting it the deserted streets of Pioneer 2 (in a kind of alternate reality). What with buildings and stuff, it could be interesting. I'll just wait and see how I feel on that one.

At the moment I'm trying to think of some factor that might connect the little battle scenes I write. I can't wait to try Force against Force! Oh, the joy of techs! I have very specific theories about how techniques work, so I might write those in. And then for a finalé, maybe a free for all with them all thrown in together? *shrugs*
These are just random ideas. Chances are I'll end up doing something completely different.

[Tenks reaction2]

Ok, sounds good can't wait to see them. Ranger on Ranger that will be very interesting.