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    Quote Originally Posted by DaGamer14 View Post
    This was a really amazing plot. But just like Bess said about Eggman not wondering why he shrunk.
    Wait scratch that. He would wonder why he shrunk, a little bit, then he'll try to stomp Sonic with his, "ZOMG HUGE FOOT!" Also you could've wrote some more in Stage 4. But still this would be amazing
    video game logic. you want something to happen that's logical ut then it's something illogical, then you are like "why didn't you do that!? it would make more sense!"
    Don't take me seriously, dudes. I'm actually crazy.

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    Quote Originally Posted by bigant View Post
    video game logic. you want something to happen that's logical ut then it's something illogical, then you are like "why didn't you do that!? it would make more sense!"
    Yes

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    Quote Originally Posted by bigant View Post
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    Stage 3- Amy’s house

    Sonic is on the couch.

    Sonic- AMY! HEY!

    Amy looks to the side of her.

    Sonic- DOWN HERE!

    Amy looks down.

    Amy- hello.. AH! RAT!!!

    Sonic panics.

    Sonic- WHERE!?

    Amy smacks sonic, causing him to fall down.

    Sonic- why does everything want to hit me today!?

    Amy moves her head closer to sonic.

    Amy- s… sonic…?

    Sonic- yep… it’s me… in the flesh…

    Amy- w… why are you tiny!?

    Sonic- long story… listen… could you uh… help me with something…

    Amy- me!?

    Sonic- yeah… I kinda need to get the antidote from eggman and-

    Amy- you want me to HELP YOU!?

    Amy gets excited.

    Sonic- hah… yeah…

    Amy- *calms down* ok! Let me just get my purse!

    The purse is on the other side of the couch where sonic is, she reaches for it, sonic flinches. Amy stops and looks at sonic.

    Amy- … you flinched…

    Sonic- no I didn’t!

    Amy- you still hate me…

    Sonic- WHAT!? n.NO! I don’t hate-

    Amy- then why did you flinch? You thought I was going to hug or kiss you… well, I’M NOT!

    Sonic- Amy…

    Amy- if you’ve noticed, I haven’t been around you for 3 months! *laughs* typical amy, right?

    Amy starts to cry.

    Amy- I’m not like that anymore… I just want you to love me or at least, be friends with me…

    Sonic- but, we are friends, Amy…

    Amy- then why do you ignore me or run away from me all the time then? Is that friendship!? I don’t always want to hug you… sometimes I just want to talk… to my hero…

    Sonic- …you think I’m your hero?

    Amy- of course I do… I remember when you first saved me from little planet…

    Sonic- you remember that?

    Amy- yes! I admire you…

    She cries, sonic looks at the table in-front of her, he runs and jumps onto the table, there is a box of tissues on the table, sonic pulls out a tissue and offers it to Amy.

    Amy- thank you, sonic…

    She takes it.

    Sonic- listen… I haven’t been a good friend to you… maybe if you stop acting like a crazy person around me all the time then maybe I’ll spend a little time with you, deal?

    She wipes her eyes.

    Amy- deal! …may I…?

    Sonic- *laugh* okay, this one time…

    She picks up sonic and hugs him, second past, she is still hugging him.

    Sonic- uh… Amy?

    She opens her eyes and puts him down.

    Amy- um… sorry!

    Sonic- it’s fine so, you helping me or what?
    I loved this part also. It's very touching and believable. I wish it would have been explored more since it's kind of short(part of the reason is I love Sonic x Amy or "Sonamy" as people call it).^^

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    Sonic- I didn't even know animals went to school.
    Sonic is an animal, too along with Amy, Cream, and etc.


    Quote Originally Posted by bigant View Post
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    Amy- it's optional... the animal's parents usually leave their child at the age of 4 so... most of us don't even know that we could go to school, we really don't need it because we're BORN inteligent but, since vanilla refuses to let go of her daughter, she made the decision for cream to go to school... yeah...
    This one doesn't make any sense to me. If they are born intelligent, there's no purpose for Cream to go to school. The reason of Vanilla not letting her daughter go also seems weird, too. It would be more of her being so protective of Cream that she not let her go to school due to bullying or being influenced by the wrong crowd.

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    Eggman- that robot is going to give me hearing problems...

    Orbot- what is going on? why does cubot sound so gay?

    eggman looks at him with a strange face.

    Orbot- "HAPPY", it means "happy"

    Eggman- oh! well!
    LOL! This part is funny. ^^


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    Stage 4- kitchen
    I like the idea of a kitchen stage. I also think it's funny since Sonic will be afraid of the frying pan and the oven, lol.


    Quote Originally Posted by bigant View Post
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    *fades to sonic and amy*

    Sonic makes it to cream’s class room, amy is already there.

    Sonic- HEY! WHY DID YOU DITCH ME!?

    Cream- did you hear something?

    Amy- it’s sonic. He’s mad because I didn’t find him immediately.

    Sonic- well, since your usually so obsessed with me…

    Amy- I told you I’m over that besides, I was going to look for you after I picked up cream.
    Although this scene is funny, Amy wouldn't abandon him like that even if she has "calmed down". It would be her opportunity to watch out for him and gaining gratitude from Sonic along with making her feel she's really needed.

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    Eggman- no more backtalk? Good! Now, what was I going to say? Oh yes! Sonic, you’re looking for this-

    *eggman shows him the antidote*

    Eggman- right…?

    Sonic- the antidote!

    Eggman- that’s right… If you can find my air base, I’ll give it to you!

    Sonic- what’s the catch?

    Eggman- no catch… okay, maybe 1 little catch… if you don’t find my base in an hour then I’ll activate the trap door under my prestigious jail cell and then, the fox and the rabbit will fall and die.

    Tails- uh… I can fly…

    Vanilla- I can fly too…

    Eggman- DANG IT! Well… something bad WILL happen to these two… you can bet that it will be ugly…
    LOL! This part made me laugh a lot. The only flaw is Eggman would be aware of his captives being able to fly.

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    Shadow- what are you two brats doing here!?
    LOL! I couldn't help but laugh at this. I know Shadow isn't very nice, but isn't he a little more caring towards Amy since she reminds him of Maria?

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    Shadow- ha ha ha… okay… tell you what… I’ll let you in if sonic can beat me in a battle!

    Sonic- you’re crazy, I can’t fight you and win!

    Shadow- what’s wrong? Is the fastest thing alive afraid to fight the ultimate life form? I’m in shock.

    Sonic- I’m freakin’ an inch tall! I can’t-

    Amy- I’ll do it!

    Sonic- …what?

    Shadow- interesting… alright, little girl! If you can beat me, I’ll let you in.

    Sonic- are you crazy!?

    Amy-funny, it actually sounded that you REALLY cared for me.

    Sonic- …

    Shadow- enough of this! READY!?

    Amy boss- shadow the hedgehog
    I'm not sure the reason why Amy and Shadow would be fighting. But, I overall like the concept of your script and hope to see you continue to do more in the future. ^_^
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    Amy- I think I got dirt on my skirt…


    *shadow is kneeling down, panting*


    Shadow- I!? shadow the hedgehog was beaten by a kid!?


    Sonic- alright! She won! Now open the door for us!


    *shadow grins and smiles*


    Shadow- no can do…


    Cream- no fair! Amy beat you!


    Shadow- hahaha… foolish child… I DON’T GIVE UP THAT EASILY!!!


    *the chaos emeralds appear and surround shadow*


    Sonic- you lost… THERE’S NO NEED FOR THAT!


    Shadow- really!? I always lose to you! I will NOT be beaten by a little girl!


    *cream throws a rock at shadow’s head, causing the transformation to stop*


    Shadow- OW!!!


    Cream- open the gate! Mr. shadow!


    Shadow- *grumble* FINE! Just tell me your business here…


    Sonic- we’re trying to locate eggman’s base so I can get back to normal now, OPEN THE GATE.


    *shadow opens the gate*


    Shadow- there. I opened it.


    *they walk through the gate*


    Sonic- I swear, he tries to hard…


    *they walk inside the base*


    Amy- so, where do you think we should go?


    Cream- I think we should find the master computer, from there we can access eggman's profile. the profile will most likely have the whereabouts of his base.


    *amy and sonic look at her, confused*


    Cream- what? I read books too, y'now...


    Sonic- alright, where's the master computer?


    Cream- top secret, only elite members and officials can get inside.


    Sonic- you don't say... SHADOOOW!!!!


    Amy- what are you doing?


    Sonic- shadow is an elite member therefore, he can help us.


    Cream- he looked pretty mad when amy beat him...


    Amy- ya, maybe we should- sonic? sonic!?


    *sonic runs up onto shadow's shoulder*


    Sonic- hello shadow...


    Shadow- W-WHAT!? GET OFF OF ME!


    *shadow tries to shake him off, sonic holds on*


    Sonic- na ah ah... not yet! what do you know about the master computer...?


    Shadow- top secret.


    Sonic- oh... shadow... see, I know how much you hate me and I know you want to fight me well, I can't fight like this, I'm only an inch tall! that's why we need the computer to find eggman then, you can fight me! and I won't be a pushover, you'll get to fight me at my best but, I can't do that unless you help me...


    Shadow- heh... I accept! get ready to whipe that smirk off your face...


    *shadow talks into his communicator*


    Shadow- commander, a few of my-


    *shadow looks at them*


    Shadow- ...adquantinces want into the computer room so they can track down eggman.


    Commander- I'll be out there in a minute.


    Shadow- right!


    *shadow looks to sonic*


    Shadow- he'll be out in a minute.


    Sonic- I'm small, not death.


    *the commander walks out*


    Commander- ah, amy, cream and...


    *he walks up to shadow, he looks at sonic*


    Commander- ...sonic?
    Don't take me seriously, dudes. I'm actually crazy.

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    Quote Originally Posted by bigant View Post
    Amy- I think I got dirt on my skirt…


    *shadow is kneeling down, panting*


    Shadow- I!? shadow the hedgehog was beaten by a kid!?


    Sonic- alright! She won! Now open the door for us!


    *shadow grins and smiles*


    Shadow- no can do…


    Cream- no fair! Amy beat you!


    Shadow- hahaha… foolish child… I DON’T GIVE UP THAT EASILY!!!
    Shadow sounds more like Dr.Eggman in this scene than himself.


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    *the chaos emeralds appear and surround shadow*


    Sonic- you lost… THERE’S NO NEED FOR THAT!


    Shadow- really!? I always lose to you! I will NOT be beaten by a little girl!


    *cream throws a rock at shadow’s head, causing the transformation to stop*


    Shadow- OW!!!


    Cream- open the gate! Mr. shadow!


    Shadow- *grumble* FINE! Just tell me your business here…
    ROTF!!! I can't stop laughing from this scene! I wish this happen in a Sonic game! Cream is a very smart little girl. XDD ^^


    Quote Originally Posted by bigant View Post

    Cream- I think we should find the master computer, from there we can access eggman's profile. the profile will most likely have the whereabouts of his base.


    *amy and sonic look at her, confused*


    Cream- what? I read books too, y'now...
    Sonic and Amy wouldn't be confused by what Cream just said. She wasn't usually overly long and complicated words like Tails would do.


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    Cream- top secret, only elite members and officials can get inside.


    Sonic- you don't say... SHADOOOW!!!!


    Amy- what are you doing?


    Sonic- shadow is an elite member therefore, he can help us.


    Cream- he looked pretty mad when amy beat him...


    Amy- ya, maybe we should- sonic? sonic!?


    *sonic runs up onto shadow's shoulder*


    Sonic- hello shadow...


    Shadow- W-WHAT!? GET OFF OF ME!


    *shadow tries to shake him off, sonic holds on*


    Sonic- na ah ah... not yet! what do you know about the master computer...?


    Shadow- top secret.


    Sonic- oh... shadow... see, I know how much you hate me and I know you want to fight me well, I can't fight like this, I'm only an inch tall! that's why we need the computer to find eggman then, you can fight me! and I won't be a pushover, you'll get to fight me at my best but, I can't do that unless you help me...


    Shadow- heh... I accept! get ready to whipe that smirk off your face...
    It's odd Shadow gave in to Sonic than Amy or Cream in this situation.
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    Quote Originally Posted by bigant View Post
    Amy- I think I got dirt on my skirt…


    *shadow is kneeling down, panting*


    Shadow- I!? shadow the hedgehog was beaten by a kid!?


    Sonic- alright! She won! Now open the door for us!


    *shadow grins and smiles*


    Shadow- no can do…


    Cream- no fair! Amy beat you!


    Shadow- hahaha… foolish child… I DON’T GIVE UP THAT EASILY!!!


    *the chaos emeralds appear and surround shadow*


    Sonic- you lost… THERE’S NO NEED FOR THAT!


    Shadow- really!? I always lose to you! I will NOT be beaten by a little girl!


    *cream throws a rock at shadow’s head, causing the transformation to stop*


    Shadow- OW!!!


    Cream- open the gate! Mr. shadow!


    Shadow- *grumble* FINE! Just tell me your business here…


    Sonic- we’re trying to locate eggman’s base so I can get back to normal now, OPEN THE GATE.


    *shadow opens the gate*


    Shadow- there. I opened it.


    *they walk through the gate*


    Sonic- I swear, he tries to hard…


    *they walk inside the base*


    Amy- so, where do you think we should go?


    Cream- I think we should find the master computer, from there we can access eggman's profile. the profile will most likely have the whereabouts of his base.


    *amy and sonic look at her, confused*


    Cream- what? I read books too, y'now...


    Sonic- alright, where's the master computer?


    Cream- top secret, only elite members and officials can get inside.


    Sonic- you don't say... SHADOOOW!!!!


    Amy- what are you doing?


    Sonic- shadow is an elite member therefore, he can help us.


    Cream- he looked pretty mad when amy beat him...


    Amy- ya, maybe we should- sonic? sonic!?


    *sonic runs up onto shadow's shoulder*


    Sonic- hello shadow...


    Shadow- W-WHAT!? GET OFF OF ME!


    *shadow tries to shake him off, sonic holds on*


    Sonic- na ah ah... not yet! what do you know about the master computer...?


    Shadow- top secret.


    Sonic- oh... shadow... see, I know how much you hate me and I know you want to fight me well, I can't fight like this, I'm only an inch tall! that's why we need the computer to find eggman then, you can fight me! and I won't be a pushover, you'll get to fight me at my best but, I can't do that unless you help me...


    Shadow- heh... I accept! get ready to whipe that smirk off your face...


    *shadow talks into his communicator*


    Shadow- commander, a few of my-


    *shadow looks at them*


    Shadow- ...adquantinces want into the computer room so they can track down eggman.


    Commander- I'll be out there in a minute.


    Shadow- right!


    *shadow looks to sonic*


    Shadow- he'll be out in a minute.


    Sonic- I'm small, not death.


    *the commander walks out*


    Commander- ah, amy, cream and...


    *he walks up to shadow, he looks at sonic*


    Commander- ...sonic?
    I lol'd. I want to see Cream throw rocks at his head for real. I also like everyone's reactions to tiny Sonic

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    Hey Bess, quick question for ya, why do ya have to comment on the story and make the page that much longer? Just asking, no meaness or otherwise intended.

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