Fight in the Forest

[Scrapbrained]

Rays of amber light pierced through the canopy where the two hedgehogs stood, illuminating the area around them as if it where setting a stage for their imminent battle. An unnatural silence surrounded the two, as if their fighting spirit had frightened the animals close to them. A branch snapped, signaling Shadow to attack first.

He dashed, throwing a fist. The agile hedgehog leapt to the side dodging it. Shadow whirled, turning his punch into a kick that connected with Sonic’s stomach, sending him flying towards one of the many trees that had grown near the edge of cliff.

The tree rattled and Sonic gasped hitting the hollow but sturdy surface.

Shadow revved after with a spindash in an attempt to pummel him. Sonic recovered just in time to see the black ball wheeling towards him. He leapt upwards, narrowly avoiding the attack as the force of the spin tore the tree in half.

“My turn.” Sonic smirked as he countered with a homing attack, hitting Shadow from behind, staggering him.

“Humph... You think that hurt me?” He regained his balance and turned to Sonic.

“I’m just getting warmed up.”

“Taste the power of Chaos!” He yelled, swinging his hand in front of him, unleashing dozens of yellow bolts. They all darted for Sonic. Still in the air from the rebound of his homing attack, the only option was to block. He braced himself, feeling sharp stings all over his body. He crashed into the wild grass.

Yeowch! That hurt! Another one of those and I’ll be in such a condition where even Amy could catch me.

“How do you like it? That was my Chaos Spear.”

“Sorry, but I’ll stick with chili dogs if that’s okay with you?” Sonic roughly got to his feet.

“Funny, Faker… But I’m afraid you’ll have no choice but to have a second helping.” Shadow mocked as he positioned his hand to perform the attack once more.

"I’m ready this time!” A streak of blue bolted straight for the crimson striped hedgehog. Whipping his hand once again, he hurled the golden speared energy. In one fluid movement, the cobalt hedgehog danced around the assault, closing the gap between them. Shadow threw a kick the spry hedgehog darted under, landing a fierce uppercut to the chin. He grimaced as he skidded back across the grass.

“I bet that one hurt.” His words were full of confidence.

Shadow breathed heavily and rubbed his chin.

“I’ll acknowledge your power, Hedgehog. But, it’ll take more than that to fell me.”

“Whatever...”

A beeping rung from one of Shadow’s wrists. A voice cracked through the static. [Shadow! What are you doing?! Hurry and get back here right now before the island blows up with you on it!]

[meowthecat]

That was awesome! Both hedgehogs were completely in character. The only problem I have is with the very beginning sentence-- it felt kinda awkward for whatever reason.

But yeah, good job.

[Scrapbrained]

That was awesome! Both hedgehogs were completely in character. The only problem I have is with the very beginning sentence-- it felt kinda awkward for whatever reason.

But yeah, good job.

Thanks! I wanted to make it at least twice than how it turned out, but this was just practice to see if I could type/write a story (with action) anyway. Also, listening to what you said, I edited the beginning sentence a bit and made other slight edits as well. Hopefully it sounds better now and paints a better picture in mind.

[meowthecat]

Thanks! I wanted to make it at least twice than how it turned out, but this was just practice to see if I could type/write a story (with action) anyway. Also, listening to what you said, I edited the beginning sentence a bit and made other slight edits as well. Hopefully it sounds better now and paints a better picture in mind.

Much better beginning! Great job! *thumbs up*

(Although it looks like two lines accidentally got smushed together in the editing-- "“I bet that one hurt.” His words were full of confidence."" and "Shadow breathed heavily and rubbed his chin. “I’ll acknowledge your power, Hedgehog. But, it’ll take more than that to fell me.”" You probably already know this, but usually when there's dialogue there's a new line whenever an individual character speaks. Still, awesome job.)

[*ShiningStar*]

That was pretty good!! I enjoyed it. The characters were in character and the scene took place as if it were an actually cutscene. You can actually picture them saying something like this in SA2. You should continue. I would love to read some more.